Found it! I do remember reading this now; the pouring-the-cereal-back thing made me laugh. *smile*
I like the premise, and the use of Greek mythology. I did follow the story easily enough, I think -- Alicia's the instrument by which Lady Adrestia is punishing the boy, and consequently takes on Tiffany's appearance in his mind. (Although it's quite possible that you edited this to add hints since the first few comments were posted, seeing as I'm several weeks late to commenting here.)
I do find that his return raises a couple questions -- not so much that he's torn up, that's a logical extension of the revenge and his inability to leave -- but I find myself wondering why he's crawling when it's his arm that's injured.
I like both your characters, and the ending. The pacing here is excellent, and it flows from start to end. *smile*
And I, too, would have simply returned the cereal to the box upon discovering the lack of milk. Unless it was Frosted Mini-Wheats -- but I would never have bothered to look for any milk then.
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Date: 2012-01-30 08:59 am (UTC)I like the premise, and the use of Greek mythology. I did follow the story easily enough, I think -- Alicia's the instrument by which Lady Adrestia is punishing the boy, and consequently takes on Tiffany's appearance in his mind. (Although it's quite possible that you edited this to add hints since the first few comments were posted, seeing as I'm several weeks late to commenting here.)
I do find that his return raises a couple questions -- not so much that he's torn up, that's a logical extension of the revenge and his inability to leave -- but I find myself wondering why he's crawling when it's his arm that's injured.
I like both your characters, and the ending. The pacing here is excellent, and it flows from start to end. *smile*
And I, too, would have simply returned the cereal to the box upon discovering the lack of milk. Unless it was Frosted Mini-Wheats -- but I would never have bothered to look for any milk then.